I feel entirely neutral about today’s crit, which is a good thing (no heart-wrenching for Lisa — hooray!) I like this week’s story. I got some fantastic (and incredibly useful) suggestions from Trent. He rocks: he is a sensitive and insightful tutor (and a sufficiently devilish reader). All good on the Trent front. And there were some very helpful as well as not-so-helpful suggestions from the group. So, basically, I’m brought back to my first point: I like this story. Will take some feedback on board and leave the rest flailing about in the water until it drowns. When I’m back in the ‘real’ world I will make some edits, disregard the suggestions I don’t think will improve the story, and then send it out. Ta-da!
And since I’ve decided to be a maniac and submit two stories for Week 6, I’d better get to it…
Lisa L. Hannett 
*Will Smith in the background singing ‘Gettin splainy with it’*
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
No splainy! Save me from the splainy! 😉
“Please splain”
No way.
Watch that big puddle of splainy …
Other people keep running through it, trying to splash me with the splainy. Luckily I’m wearing invisible Wellies.
“Will take some feedback on board and leave the rest flailing about in the water until it drowns. ”
And that will be no better than it deserves!
🙂
Your stories always have cool ideas.
Maybe I was biased this time because I had to finish my own story last night and I was very tired and had to read a 7000+ word story. 🙂
Thanks Aidan, and no worries. We all get the tireds 😉